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I shall die with words like minnows
still attached to the strings of my heart,
swimming like sperm, jostled and mad,

bearing the prologue of life, the opening bars,
the glorious first drone of the chanter
that moves blood in the way of volcanoes to war,
to explosion, the crepuscular exuberance of dawn,
these minnows attached to the shimmering lines.

But the little darlings get confused in the shadows,
panic when light breaks above the tiny Os of their heads,

while the heart-pole bends
like the long slim fingers of a willow,
down, pointing down to the cress-edged creases
and rocky seams of the cold water shallows
that only the babies of the brook trout know,

beneath the laughing poplar and the somber pine,
where water striders tickle the surface of the quiet pools,
like children tracing raindrops on the glass panes
of a grey-lit room on the longest day of their lives,

I will die like minnows, still attached.
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:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Writer
"seen anyone say" there's something wrong with that but oh well
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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Writer
I HAVE NEVER EVER EVER SEEN ANYONE SAY IT'S HARD TO LET GO SO BEAUTIFULLY

unless,
of course,
that isn't what this is about at all.

in that case don't mind me.
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StormBringer23 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
:heart:

When I read; ..."the strings"...

I thought...monofilament. :ashamed:

Now I have confused little O heads stuck in my brain.
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riparii Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
No, but you did it just right! Monofilament exactly!

Yes, they're excitable little buggers, aren't they?
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brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014   General Artist
I keep thinking of remoras, for some reason.  (don't mind me, since I've been practising mindfulness I am all over the place) :-)
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riparii Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014
Remoras will do nicely. They add a bit of panache really.

You've taken up meditation?
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brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014   General Artist
I've always done yoga and other stuff but found that mindfulness is by far the most logical and accessible for me as I can do it anywhere. Yoga became to expensive at $15 a session. 
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riparii Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
Enlightenment should be free, I think.
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:iconbrunette-from-oz:
brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014   General Artist
Like all disciplines though,there are skills to be learned. Perhaps enlightenment results from mindfulness
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
That's goal, isn't it? Insofar as there is a goal.
Have you been at it long?
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brunette-from-oz Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014   General Artist
A few weeks. I love it.
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PoetsHand Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Minnows are exactly the correct fish! So very nice to see your writing!
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riparii Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
Thanks so much. It's always a treat when you stop by. :)
:trout: rvmp 
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014   Writer
Your work has been chosen as one of the Outstanding Pieces for the month of March at Word-Smiths, dear! :D
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riparii Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Aw, thanks, sweetie! :iconfurryglompplz:
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:iconpomohippie7:
pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014   Writer
You're welcome, dear. It was a great piece. :glomp: (And you always use the cutest icons!:giggle:)
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riparii Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
Thanks, I do, don't I? :) Comes from trawling emoticons when
I should be trying to become a productive member of society.
:iconpandaballoonplz:
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014   Writer
Pfft! Being a productive member of society is totally boring when compared to emoticon hunting. :giggle: 
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riparii Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014
When compared to a lot of things, come to that.....:O
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Student Writer
So much wow.
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014
Thanks sweetie. :)
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indiana-w Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014  Student Writer
:heart:  Quite welcome
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
left rather speechless.
this is great... Kate! ;)
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Thanks so much, pip!
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catch---22 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Professional Photographer
I'm torn between commenting, "a crepuscular solidao of sorts" and "get to fishin' as the fat ladies with cane poles, polyester pants and wide brimmed hats used to say."

www.youtube.com/watch?v=LgEPIY…
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
You reckon Bonnie Riatt has to go second
because she doesn't really know Portuguese and she's just pretending?

You weren't torn. Don't lie.
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catch---22 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Professional Photographer
rended even. :nod:

lol, it is a curious pairing.
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Breathtaking.
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Thanks sweetie. :fish:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm never gonna look at minnows the same. :heart:
This really is gorgeous.
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
:trout: Revamp :trout: rvmp :trout: Revamp :trout: rvmp :trout: Revamp 
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Fishies!!!!
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
Several. :nod:
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ShadowsAndStarlight Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's actually really nice! :D
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Why thank you. :) :sun:
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Rain-Sapphire Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
love love love
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Aw, thanks. :) Fish 
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014   Writer
First thought on reading this: "Wow." Second thought: "Wow." This is gorgeous.
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riparii Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Thank you LisaBee. :iconbatglompplz:
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